Separate names with a comma.
Avoid being repetitive in both names and verbs. I wouldn't call this part much of a chapter, it only consists of Snecto talking to his AI.
I think you're honest with your opinions here. I want to see how I do.
You might want to work on the proportion of the legs, especially the left leg.
I still don't understand why you haven't taken my advice...
Congratulations, but you could refrain from double posting.
I see, a crossover fan fiction. It's IJAH, Transformers, and Portal, I think. What made you write this story? Anyway, some advice. Please refrain...
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