Season 1 "John and Jack"

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  1. BrakeCrake

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    I have planned this for a long time and thought of a story.
    I think its great so far!
    Before I start, I will first explain the Characters.

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    John Screamer:
    He is one of the Twins from the Screamer family (The family is called Screamer). But John really likes to SCREAMS a lot. He is an actual Half Human Half Alien. Thats why he looks so strange. He loves his brother, Ice Cream, Video Games and Adventures!

    Jack Screamer:
    Jack is the other twin of the Screamer family. He has Tourette (I won't type what he says, I am not allowed to. So I will just write 'swear' when he swears) He is often REALLY weird and also screams. But not that much as his brother John. He loves his Brother, Video Games, Flesh and Adventures.

    Chapter 1 "The beginning"

    In the year 2000 when the twins where born, the doctors found out something weird about them.
    When they first saw them, it were three babys. But one got lost, the Parents never told them that.
    1 year later the twins finally got names, One is called John and the other Jack. But they knew something was wrong with Jack. He sometimes got red eyes when he tried to speak. The doctors found out he has got the Tourette syndrom. But that was alright for them. They were screaming a lot so they never noticed.
    When the twins were 2 years old they already could speak and Jack could swear.
    In the house was horror going on.
    John: JACK JACK!!!
    Jack: yes?
    John: Have you seen mom?
    Jack: Yes, she went (swears)
    John: uhm what?
    Jack: I'm sorry. I mean she went to the bathroom.
    So they went to the Bathroom and John screams 'MOOM'. But he screamed so loud that he pooped his diaper.
    John: Mom... I pooped....
    Mom: Don't worry honey....
    They changed the diaper.
    Many years went away and John and Jack went to KinderGarden.
    They got many friends because they were funny.
    One day they were building with Lego but then it happened.
    Friend: Can I play with you?
    John: Sure come here.
    Friend: what are you building?
    Jack: We are building a (swears) dragon ;)
    John: Uhm how are you called again?
    Jackson: My name is Jackson
    Jack: ah cool Hi Jackson!
    Jackson thought that the ship didn't looked like one, so he destroyed it.
    John screams: Are you crazy!?! It was hard work!
    He started to cry.
    Jack: Are you (swear) crazy (swears alot)
    He punches Jackson and got even more angry.
    Watcher: Ey you two! Stop fighting. Jackson you go back and think about what you have done. And you Jack stop punching everyone!
    2009 and they were in the 4th grade. John was really good in math and other languages.
    Jack was really good at PE.
    But he was bad at Maths...
    One day he got the Math question: 9+10
    His answer was 1
    Everyone laughed. But John didn't.
    John: Oh come on everyone. My brother can't do maths well, but he is good at PE! So don't la-
    But before he could finish Jack started to speak
    Jack: FINE (SWEAR) I'VE NEVER WANTED TO BE HERE (SWEARS ALOT MORE AND MORE)
    Teacher: Ok thats it Jack! Go out!
    Year 2015 the final year for John and Jack school. Their last thing was to tell about a good story, that they have ever been threw.
    They never really had something exciting in their life, so they finally asled their parents for some information.
    Mom: Uhm yeah well... You two have been threw a hard kindergarden
    John: But mom! That isnt interristing.
    Jack: Can't we just go on a Adventure? You know how (swears) we love adventures.
    Dad: ok fine

    And so they started to go on an epic adventure....

    To be continued...
     
    Last edited: Nov 19, 2015
  2. 0PN

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    Minecraft:
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    Gonna be brutally honest here.

    There were some cringy moments, and the capitalization and punctuation in some sentences was painful to read.

    Except all of that, it's somehow entertaining.
     
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  4. BrakeCrake

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    Episode 2 (sry it took so long)

    Mount Ever Rest

    So... the 2 young adventurer went on an adventure full of adventure!
    They heard about something is going on, on the mountain called: 'Mount Ever Rest'.
    John: So... This is the Mount Ever Rest...
    Jack: No we are not.
    John: NO! Not the Mount EverRest. Mount Ever Rest
    Jack: oh Ever REST. Ah... still don't get it •-•
    John: *sigh* *facepalm* Nvm... the legend says, deep down in the mountain is something like a village and someone who is missed lives there. But whe-
    Jack: (swears) look what I found heheheee xP It looks like a mountain =O
    John: Are you totally stupid??
    Jack: maybe... maybe NOT ●_●
    John: Jack can't you just be normal for a day?
    Jack: nope NEVER :)
    John: Then just help me find that village fine?
    Jack: Does it have villagers too??
    John: No Jack totally not...
    Jack: Lets find it!!!!
    A Wolf falls from the sky.
    Wolf: Waddup itz meh Wolf #1
    I came down extra for you 2.
    Jack: Who (swears) are you?
    John: JACK CAN'T YOU LISTEN? He just said it!!
    Jack: oh look a there is a Wolf! Come here little cutie patuty :3
    The wolf and John did a facepalm because Jack didnt listened.
    Then, it gets foggy and windy.
    Its getting spooky and out of the foggy mountain they heard a deep voice:
    ???: Hello my friends

    End of Episode 2