My 1st creepypasta.

It's a pokemon Creepypasta. I hope you enjoy, and tell me what you think.

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"Yes, you're back."
"You're different."
"Even though, I'll love you till the end of time."
"You'll be MINES, FOREVER, AND EVER..."
"No, wait, please! I don't want to be yours forever! Noooo!"

When I was still young, I had only one favourite pokemon. It was Teddiursa. I fell in love with that Pokemon since it's debut, which was in Gen 2. I bought of a
Generation 2 game, and that was Pokemon Silver. I didn't enjoy Gold and Crystal very much, I prefered Silver instead of all of them. I bought it off on eBay,
since there we're no more in the stores. I started it up, and got exited. I used a cheating device to get Teddiursa in the game first, so basically, I was cheating.
The game was pretty cheap, only for 5$, but I didn't care less, I just wanted the game. I used a few cheats to change my UI (User Interface) to make it look way, way
more better. I made a few sprites. My first sprite, which was the protagonist, had pretty short hair, going up. He had a confident smile, and ready to start his
journey. The clothes we're completely different, but it looked like the Gen 3 clothes, I just added a few changes. I removed the hat as well. Second sprite, the
rival. He looked kind of the same, but I made him uglier, like made him bald, made his clothes like a hobo, and yeah. I always thought as the protagonist as the
sexiest character in the game. I needed to test the game, but I was too lazy to do it. I told my friends, let's just call him "Bob" to test the game. I edited the
game, completely, and it took me about 4-6 months to complete. A few months later, Bob gave me the game back. He told me these words:

"Hey dude. I really liked your game!"

I replied:
"Thanks dude! I appreciate your feedback!"

He was an extreme hacker, edited many things, in a simply way, and in a shorter way.

Bob said: "Dude, I added a few modifications to the game, mind checking them out?"

I was exited, then, I played the game and checked the modifications.


The game seemed the same, I didn't really notice anything. I didn't put any cheats or anything, and I wanted to make it legit. Later on, once I got to Kanto,
many NPCs said: "I'm truly sorry, it's so sad." I was like, what the hell? What happened? I silently whispered to myself that and moved on. I forgot that Bob
has put a Teddiursa in his box, and I checked it out later on. Before I checked my box, more strange things happened. I used the PokeGear, to wake up Snorlax, like
usual, but then, the sounds was eerie, and nearly broke my ear. Once Snorlax woke up, he has a strange moveset. His sprite was the same, and his level. His moveset
was: Sing, Parish Song, Curse and Pain Split. I knew Bob would do something like this, to get revenge at me for what I've done to him in the past. I didn't care, I
was an extreme gamer, not scared of anything in gaming. I fought him, and after the battle, someone said this. "Go on, beat Red. With your current power, I know you
can do it. Hmph." Those words, we're getting in my head for a while. I didn't care less, and continued. Once I got to Mt.Silver, my pokemons we're still Lvl40-ish.
They we're really low, but I didn't care. I checked my box, my Teddiursa, who was called Teddie, looked wierd. He had a shattered eye, replaced with spilling blood,
a broken arm, which seems to be burned or something, and, oh man. It was highly terrifying. I didn't take him, because he was highly creepy. His status, was DEAD.
Highly terrified, I fought Red. After beating him, and after going through the credits, it went through normal. I clicked "Continue" and it said, "A FEW YEARS
LATER." The protagonist was looking sad, him being in Lavender Town, even without the Pokemon Tower. The NPCs offered me items, but the protagonist, called Justin,
responded with a simple, "No." I didn't have any Pokemon whatsoever. I walked into the tall grass, and it simply said these: "The WILD Pidgey left you be."
"The WILD Rhyhorn ran away." Once I returned to New Bark Town, my character automatically went to his house, and went to bed. In his dreams, he said "IT can bring
him back, IT can do anything." I was like, wat. I didn't know what was going on, but whatever. I did the MissingNo glitch, knowing that it wouldn't work in Gen2,
but to my surprise, it worked! Justin said: "You're mines." After that, the text said: "MissingNo was caught!" What the hell, he didn't even do anything! Meh. I was
back in New Bark, with Teddie outside of the pokeball. MissingNo was a key item, and I used it. Professor Elm said: "No, Justin! Don't use it!" Justin was like:
"In a world that cheated me, why should I play fair?" After that, it said: "Justin has gotten Te##@*!" What? His sprite was the same. Teddie, started talking.
"I'm back!" "Do you still love me?" I had a choice answer, saying yes or no. I responded with "NO." He answered: "What? You don't love me anymore. No matter, you'll
be mines forever, UNTIL THE END OF TIME."

My game crashed after that, and I knew that I wouldn't see Teddiursa the same way anymore.

 

Nice job. Even though I'm not really into Pokemon, this is actually a pretty good creepypasta.

 

Thanks!
I dedicated like 1/2 hour doing this! I guess my effort came to work!

 

I noticed quite a few spelling mistakes, but I'll look past those :p
My name is Justin... ._.
It was pretty good overall. However, if I were to suggest anything, I would say to use more descriptive word choice, maybe a bit more word variety, (ex, in the dialogue between the speaker and Bob, everything is dude) and I think the caps is a bit excessive.
Anyway, considering it's your very first one, it's pretty good. I especially liked your description of Teddie, it really created a vivid image in my mind. In fact, now I feel like writing my own creepypasta! XD (maybe)

 

I was in a rush to do it, that's why I got spelling errors. xD
Justin is also my name IRL, I just put it there for lawlz.

 

:O we have the same IRL name. Huh.
And it's fine, like I said, I looked past the spelling errors, and it was pretty good!
Speaking of creepypastas, I just posted a really short one that I wrote XD