1 The rise of the Darkness king story

Hello everyone Im PavlovaPrince an up and coming writer and this is my first story. If you like my story and want me to do more comment. I will also be adding characters in my story if you ask, you need to state if you want to have a hero role or villan. Story characters @LouiseXminerX and @PavlovaPrince

Chapter one: The begining
"The spirits have risen you" "The spirits have risen you". "What's that whispering in my ear" I thought, I looked around but couldn't because my eyes were in pitch darkness I tried to open them but couldn't. Then after a while of pitch darkness I regathered my exhausted body, my senses came back to me. I was in the middle of nowhere , there was no civilization near, nothing but a dry bleak desert. I started walking through it until I noticed a town in the distance "YES!" I shouted with glee. Dente was the town I had stumbled upon, I found out the town was called Dente because a ragged old sign said, then suddenly "WeLcOmE tO dEnTe " someone said I looked around "hello?!" I said "over her" the voice said, then I looked down. It was a dwarf with an eyepatch that said "hey giganto look down here". "So what brings you to Dente the man asked, "I don't know I just woke up and started walking through a desert" I replied, "By the way what's your name" I asked the dwarf, Louie I'm a local around here who knows many secrets of Dente's past, oh well hello I'm Pavl'o , my name is french. "So what are some of the secrets around this town, and can you tell me some?" I responded, "I'm afraid I can't tell you" he replied. "Louie is there anywhere I can stay?" I asked with a polite manor, "Yes, my family owns an inn down the road" Louie said "Thanks" I answered. The family inn was easy to find because because there was a big sign saying "family inn". When I got to the inn's reception a lovely cheerful receptionist named Louise greeted me, "How's it going" I asked "Great!"she said. Once I got my room key I dashed strait to my room it was room 11. When I opened the door to my room I was delighted to see drinks in a refrigerator and food. After some time of eating the refreshments a voice called and then a rock shattered the window in the room and a shady figure appeared.

More chapters will be made soon...


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Ooh, nice conceptualization of the story. A few noticeable grammatical errors that detract for the story's readability, but doing a bit of final revision before posting should fix most of it.

Overall, I like it and look forward to further chapters!

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Nice job dude!
Just some mistakes in the chapter and you spelled my name wrong a couple of times. It is Louise btw, not Louie ;)

Edit: Just realised they were two different characters. Ops!