Survivor Challenge 3

Shining Supernovas
@ElijahR2002
@Jit FINISHED
@Darkstorm77 FINISHED
Xenohs 8th

Blue Galaxies
@Ninjalachlan5 FINISHED
@Dirtbikes95
TheRealSmg 7th
@valentino FINISHED


Your challenge is to write the best mystery murder story. Preferably a good enough one to be a first chapter of a Murder story.

You have under 48 hours.

 

Length plz?
Edit: Ty

 

Minimum 100 words. Max 600

 

Here we go.

Mandy and Emma, twin girls, were at a sleepover with some friends.
"Emma, truth or dare?" asked Duncan.
"Dare!"
"I dare you to pretend you are-"
Jennie's mother came in.
"Guys it's pretty lAte" she said.
"Sorry Mrs Burns" said Shaun.

Everyone was asleep.
Mandy was having a nightmare. She dreamed that she got murdered and hoped it was a dream.

Everyone woke up the next morning to see Mandy with a knife in her chest.
"WHO DID THIS?" cried Emma

 

Spoiler: Story

Four tales

Jack was misunderstood. He knew nobody cared about him, so that is why nobody knew the cause. Jack was writing a story. He had a few books and quills ready, he knew he would need more. Jack’s life was private; he was closed off. He lived alone, at a house on a cliff. His writing had been beautiful- so magnificent! All the evidence he needed…
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Annie was strolling casually along the beach. It was near sunset, and she liked to come around here this time. She was very young, almost 9. She most of all came for one reason- she always liked to try to spot Ol’ Jack- or Ol’ Hack- which was what most of the village called him. Yet she saw nothing bad in him. Sometimes, she was lucky enough to see into his house from all the way down at the beach, of course since his house was on a cliff at the rim of the beach. She had been walking- then screamed. She saw Ol’ Jack- on the ground- body and all. Then she screamed again… but it was quickly muffled.
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Officer Roland was puzzled. The official story published out was that Annie had been killed by Ol’ Hack, but he was gone too. No matter what the others said, he knew what had happened. He was investigating the beach under the cliff- the other policemen were investigating the house and interviewing Annie’s parents-. He was walking along when he saw a torn piece of paper. He didn’t need to read it twice. He tore the paper in many pieces and threw the remains in the ocean.
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Sparrow was a lonely fellow, as most would say. Others would say he was a Hill Billy, or some other offensive term. But he knew what had happened to Annie- and Ol’ Hack! For Sparrow, as most called him, was the closest house to Hack’s. He was in his car, going to the village when he noticed a police car going on a dirt road in the opposite direction. There was only one place that path lead to. Half an hour later, he heard 2 screams.
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Jack had the evidence, and he would publish it. Though he hated the townspeople, justice was more important than self-need. Then he heard his door creek open.
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Sparrow thought that other policemen were in on it with Roland, so he decided to do the law for himself. One crucial piece of evidence Sparrow found (on the dirt road) was a note. This may be the reason why Sparrow went into the officer’s home last night, and killed Roland.
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Sparrow was arrested and kept for jail for 20 minutes. But then the policemen, further investigating the officer’s home, smelled something rotted, coming from the basement. What was there? Well, Annie had gotten a little like Jack now hadn’t she?

 

Can it be chat format, like the below...
Emma: What
Daniel: Please

 

Yes

 

This is nowhere near 100 words. You fail!

Yes.

 

As I walked out onto the deck, I knew this day would be like no other. The sky was completely clear, and yet there was panic on my street. I had to ask what was going on. As my neighbor nervously explained of the murder in town, I asked of the suspects. The murder clearly took place in the town church. There were some suspects in the church at time time, but I couldnt believe it would be any of them. "It could have been Mark, Julia, or Jackie." Mark was a man who I had lots in common with. We both were athiests, we both loved the color blue. I never knew Julie, as she was never around. She always wore a ring wearing the word "Hope." Jackie was a bad person, but would never murder anyone. I don't know who to believe it could have been. Or could it have been...

 

John The Ghost Kid
Based on real events
There was once a kid called John, he was a ghost kid, in school's of Chile, he appears every day to scare the children.
One day, a kid called Stewart was alone in the school, with his friends and stewart decided to go with a camera and try to have footage of him
He did not find any footage, but when he left school, at 7:36 p. m.
He saw John in a window, tresspassing doors easily, dissapearing and appearing, etc
When Stewart was in his house, he saw the John again, walking on the streets.
He said "It might be an illusion" and he went to sleep
In his sleep, he was hearing laughing kids, crying babies, etc
And that happened for 1 week, he couldn't handle it anymore.
On the school, again, scared, he tried to get more footage with the camera, he did.
Showed it to his friends, his friends believed him and tried to have more proof.
Until the school announcer said: Stewart, died from paranoia-come to directory for detailed information
His friends were sad, and they decided to go to the directory
They asked for more information.
They got this paper saying:
Stewart, 11, Male: Reason: He did not die, he suicided because on his house, he saw a ghost kid, he was alone, and when Stewart's mom came in, on his forehead it said: John was here
And on his chest, he had a noted sticked to it, it said: Mom, dad, if you see this, leave the house now, there are ghosts in here. -Stewart

The end​

 

@Dirtbikes95 you are the last one. :)

 

WARNING: Contains some language and mild descriptions of violence.

It was suppose to be a nice shiny day. Instead it turned out to be the most shittiest(is that a word, :p) day of the year. However this day about to take a turn for the worse.
"Ughhh, Fuck Life", said Daniel. Today was suppose to be the day of the wedding. However the wedding is ruined due to the thunderstorms. Infact there is even a tornado warning in affect all day.
"Well we can have it tomorrow!", said Emma."
"But the parents comeback tomorrow, and they have no idea we were even dating!", replied Daniel.
"Well, all I can say is.... Tell them.", Emma said with fear.
"Are you Fuc----", Daniel was interrupted with the sound of the door bell.
It was the parents at the door. Daniel screamed at the sight and slammed it. The re opened it right after he told Emma to "To leave now the my parents are home early!". Emma left.
"Hi, Mom and Dad"- Daniel said angry. What was even added more salt to the wound was that the entire family was there.
"Fuck"- Whispered Daniel.

It was night time and this is where things take a turn. The whole family had to stay because of the weather and Emma was till hiding in the closet! She needed to get out. Only to be met with a mom who then punched her for fewr she was a robber. Emma let out the beans and told the truth.

"DANIEL! GET YOUR ASS OVER HERE!"- The mother said and well the whole family heard and came. People were mad at Daniel, people were angry at Emma. All types of angier. Infact the sound from the thunder made it even more realistic.

After 2 hours of fighting, it was 8:01 AM. Everyone was asleep. Daniel woke up to the sight of red. Just red. To the left he turned to a sharp, bloody knife. He then turned to see a bloody blanket. The thunder stopped. There was no noise. A quiet room as Daniel lifted the blanket too find a bloody filled Emma. Her hair cut off, her chest opened, her head about to fall. Her wrists were cut, her eyes were open, and to make it worse. Her ring was destroyed.

Daniel dropped, and yelled. It was such a mystery. Everyone was mad at Emma. Someone did this. But who? The mom, the Dad, the Uncle, the Grandma. Who? Who knows? Find out in Chapter 2.

- Sorry for some use of strong language. However I don't know if I should continue this story in the creations section. I am actually getting really in to it. Lol.

 

PLEASE DO.



@Dirtbikes95 for your consideration :)

 

Once upon a time...

Meh, I don't really like the way this hole "Survivor" thing turned out. I'm dropping out. Thanks for everything though.

 

why everyone be using my name tho

C;

 

because its generic

 

The teams are merged. Dirtbikes95 forfeited.
Next challenge coming soon.

 

Since it's the merge I have a confession.
I am the Saboteur!

 

:o not a shocker.