A Story I'm Making - The 8 Gods Of Hell

Suggestion: Don't make every god go stronger/mad each time he/she got damaged (like Super Mario bosses) it's kinda overused and if you make them stay calm or let them have a secret attack, it will confuse the readers and make the story more interesting! :)

 

Thanks for the suggestion! Sorry about how i made every god go mad/stronger if she/he gets damaged. I'll make it like the bosses have a secret weapon ;)

Sorry, but i don't need any characters now ;-; I'm sure once i finish this series, I'll make another story which needs characters ;)
But thanks for asking! :)

 

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What will happen to Slevin? D:
Characters:
@Katy9078
@Oreo_Pug
@Rilakkumaloverr
@GoobyHasAnOpinion
@galladepow
@Slevin
@jentoschaf
@CakeSquid
New Characters! :O
@Mats9799

Chapter 9 - The Lightning Zap
As we go to the world, we saw this huge pillar with stairs around it. I saw some guy ontop of it, raising his hands up. As we went up the stairs, i saw a guy, creating thunder around him, also a little pikachu next to him. I got my instrument ready, But then suddenly the guy turned around and zapped lightning to the instrument, and it went off the pillar. I was sweating. "How dare you!" He said. "Its Mats The Thunder Lord..." Oreo explained. "Pikachu! Use thunderbolt!" Mats shouted. The pikachu stored the eletricity in its cheek, this is bursted out of his body, right at us. It got me, and i felt the pain. Finally the shock stopped, but I fell to the ground. "Louise!" jerkboy shouted. I looked up, an lightning ball was heading straight at me, I quickly got my dolphin whistle out and i blowed it. The lightning was about to hit me, but the dolphins spawned just in time. It went infront of me and it got zapped. It went down. I got up on my feet. Katy got her bow out and shot it straight at pikachu, but then it bursted a bigger lightning at the arrow, and the arrow just fell to the ground. I felt my heart pound. I used my magical hand on pikachu, and its eyes turned purple. I made it electrocuted Mats. "Gaaar!" He said. "I think i got him!" I cheered. But he started to laugh. "He he he... HAH HAH HAH!" He laughed. I frowned. "Fools! If i get eletrocuted by lightning, i become STRONGER!" He laughed. Man, I should have KNOWN it! He started to make the lightning stronger, and an lightning almost hit me.
"Louise! Ice Swoooord!" Jerkboy shouted. I was confused at first, but then I knew what he was saying, and this was the only way. I raised my ice sword up. Mats made an lightning touch my ice sword. I held on tight. As I openned my eyes, the ice sword turned yellow! "Louise! Go NOW!" Katy cheered. I charged at Mats. He used his hands to shoot an lightning bolt at me, but i just held my ice sword infront of me, and the lightning. It just made the ice sword stronger. I held the sword and stabbed Mats in the chest. "Gaaah!" He shouted. Suddenly, the rain stopped, the ice sword was back to normal, and Mats was back to normal. "Good thinking by the way jerkboy!" I said. He winked. "Grrr... GAAAR!" I turned around, Mats was suddenly slowly changing back to a god. I was sweating.
"Fools! HA HA HA!" Mats shouted. His pikachu even resurrected. "PIKA PIKA!" The pikachu shouted. I felt my heart race like a racing car. The only thing i can think off is my instrument. I looked down, and I was so surprised that the instruent was in one piece! "Guys! Follow me!" I shouted. I ran down the stairs. "Come back!" Mats shouted. He went down the stairs too, zapping lightning bolts at the stairs. He shot one at the stair i was about to step on, and i fell, right onto the hard rock ground. "Arrrggg..." I groaned. I was unconsious.
Katy screamed. Oreo looked at the instrument and she smiled. She ran and picked it up and played it as fast as she could. "Piiikkaaa!" Pikachu screamed. It covered it's ears. So did Mats. "ARRRG! MY EARS!" He shouted. "Katy! Now!" Jerkboy shouted. Katy got her bow out and shot Mats and Pikachu. I woke up, and i saw Mats and Pikachu on the ground. Then they FINALLY went back to normal. "Are you sure their are finally normal?" Katy shivered. "If the orb appears, then definitly." Oreo said, and then an orb appeared. It surronded me and Katy, and an lightning rod appeared. Stephano suddenly appeared as she spawned an portal. "I've heard good news that you have defeated the all mighty Mats!" She cheered. "Can you take them back to the angel's palace?" I asked. "Sure! I'll tell the others to help carry them." She said. Gooby and Galla came. Gooby picked up Pikachu while Galla and Stephano held up Mats into the portal. "Who's our final boss?" I asked. "Wheatly, the space king. But I don't know if hes the last boss. CakeSquid could still be alive. And maybe Slevin..." Jerkboy explained. "I hope Slevin is doing alright." Katy whinned. Oreo openned up the portal and we hopped in.
TO BE CONTINUED...
Thank you all for reading my story! I hope you enjoyed it.
Sorry! I don't need anymore characters to be in the story! Maybe when i finish this story, I'll create another one, and I'm sure I'll ask for characters!
And PLEASE ignore any wrong spellings or grammer ;)
Thanks for reading! :D
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Nice story!

 

The final god... Will they defeat him with success or go down into our graves?
We are close to the finish. Mysteries remain, is Slevin alive? Is CakeSquid dead? Will they defeat the last boss intime? Read and your questions maybe answered.
Characters:
@Katy9078
@Oreo_Pug
@Rilakkumaloverr
@GoobyHasAnOpinion
@galladepow
@Slevin
@jentoschaf
@CakeSquid
@Mats9799
New Character!:
@Wheatley
Enjoy ;)

Chapter 10 - Space
This is probably our strangest world. We are floating in space, breathing normally. "Look!" Oreo pointed. I saw earth. It looked so awesome from up here. I suddenly turned around , and some small robot with 1 eye was floating around. I was laughing, and so did the rest of us. "Yes i know, I'm a clown, but prepare to die!" Wheatly said, but we hardly heard him since we kept laughing. "Ok, enough now." Wheatly mumbled. We still laughed "THATS IT!" He shouted. Then, 100s of wheatley with different coloured eyes appeared. I looked up, and now this didn't seem as funny as before.
I was swimming like a dog when i was trying to run away. The gravity really didn't help, and i was floating up and down trying to go straight. "Now! Transform!" Wheatly shouted. "But we don't want to!" Some wheatlys said. "It hurts!" They kept saying. "Arrrgg.. If you don't want to transform, then ATTACK!" He shouted. Then 100s of wheatleys charged at us. I quickly got my ice sword out. One by one, i hit them side to side. The rest of us also defended. Soon all the wheatleys were dead, accept for the ones with the blue eye. "Its over. Now surrender now!" Jerkboy shouted. "Hehehe..." He giggled. "Wha- Whats so funny?" Katy asked. "I'm glad you defeated them all..." He said. "Because now I can finally transform without them whinning at me!" He laughed. Then, all the wheatleys floating around floated to Wheatley. Then, about 1 minute later, my mouth was wide up. A giant wheatley robot was there, with all the wheatleys joined up. "RUUUUN!" I shouted.
I kept paddling, but the robot was so close, it grabbed me by my leg. "Let go of me!" I demanded. I got my the dolphin whistle out and i played it. 20 dolphins were there, but when they threw spears at the robot, it did nothing, do the dolphins disided to disappear. I got my ice sword out, but it was no use. I got the instrument, but it didn't affect them, since they don't have ears. I used every weapon I got, but it did nothing.
Katy, Oreo and Jerkboy were trying to get my down, but they were no use, eather. I remember one weapon that i haven't used: The magical hand. I got it out, i saw the other robot hand come straight at me, looking like it will punch me back to earth. I raised my magical hand out, and the robot's hand was about to hit me, but then it freezed. All the wheatley eyes turned purple. The hand let go of me. I made the robot's hands punch himself on the head, and when they did it on the 7th time, it went down. All the wheatleys seperated. Then an rainbow orb surronded me and Katy. An we got an robot gun i think, but it only came with 2 bullets. "Ermmm... First weapon we got that is useless." I said. "Wait, its not!" Oreo chimmed in. "I remember, an robot gun can kill anything in 1 shot. I mean ANYTHING! We can use it to defeat Lord Nightshroud!" Oreo explained. Katy then went crazy. "OMG OMG OMG!" Katy cheered. "I finally have the power to open up the final portal to Lord NightShroud, but you seem all tired, we should sleep at the angel's palace." Jerkboy explained. I did seem pretty exhausted. I saw Wheatley go back to normal. Katy picked it up and we took him with us.
As we arrived at the palace, we went in a house with about 4 beds. "Just one question Jerkboy." I asked. "Hmmm?" He mumbled. "If you can access the final portal, does that mean CakeSquid is dead?" I asked. "I haven't thought about that, probably. But NightShroud can resurrect anything, so maybe once we get in his home, he can resurrect him, and that means we will be locked in there forever until we beat CakeSquid." He explained. "But we kind of did defeat CakeSquid before right? Which might mean it would be esy." Katy said. "But Lord Nightshroud can make him much stronger, and i mean much stronger. Even stronger then that giant wheatley robot. And worst of all, he could make Slevin another god too." Oreo explained. I frowned. "Lets just go to sleep and we'll see tomorrow." I said. And i closed my eyes, and i fell asleep, but i had an nightmare, which might be our future.
TO BE CONTINUED...
Wow, talk about history! Just look at the first chapter and then come to now. So much things has happened, and now we're close to the end.
But one thing for sure: Is my nightmare going to be us dead?
Note: Please ignore any wrong spellings!
Thanks for reading! :D​

 

Guys, this final chapter will be super long, and i need time to think of a ultimate ending...
So here's what I'm going to do: I'm going to do a little sneak peak to what the story might be like.
And also if you comment, you might be in it!
Here's a little teenie sneak peak:
"I looked around, Blood covered the floor. I was alone, with Lord Nightshroud infront of me, planning on his next move. My weapons are usless, and I knew this was my grave... But then i saw a huge light..."
What is the light? :O
Comment on what you think it is! And you could be the next person to be in my story :D
STAY TUNED!

 

illuminati
jk.
the light from heAVENNN

 

I like the way i am the character with the most drama lol xD. This is a great story keep it up :D

 

I think the light is because they are doing test on you

 

The final chapter is here... What you have all have been waiting on...
CHAPTER 11!
I want to thank all these people for being in my story!:
@Katy9078
@Oreo_Pug
@Rilakkumaloverr
@GoobyHasAnOpinion
@galladepow
@Slevin
@DiamondCraft
@jentoschaf
@Andior
@CakeSquid
@Mats9799
@Wheatley
And now... the final character added is.
@ST3PMAN
I know your thinking "Hang on, he didn't figure out what the light was" Well the reason why i chose him is because i forgot to make him a god in the story >.< so I'm going to add him in this chapter!
Thank you all for supporting me to do this story! And I'm 100% sure i will do another story with HEAPS of characters to be chosen!
Now enough chit chatting! The ultimate chapter is here!!!
Warning: Little bit of violence and blood in this :(

FINAL CHAPTER - THE LAST HOPE
In my nightmare, all there was were all my friends on the ground with blood around them. Lord NightShroud was infront of me, planning on his next move. My weapons were useless... But then i saw a huge light.
I woke up. Freaking out. "Woah Louise, you okay?" Katy asked. I was sweating, hiding my face from Katy. "I'm... I'm fine, just had a werid dream." I choked. "Werid dream?" Oreo said. My heart was beating like 4 times in a second. "My... my werid dream was..." I couldn't think. "Louise, tell us, we can help." Jerkboy suggested. I took a deep breath. I told them the dream i had, and they all frowned. "I told you i shouldn't have told you!" I shouted. "Maybe we shouldn't have asked." Oreo said. "But guys, its just a dream, maybe it won't be our future. Maybe we might win!" Katy cheered. "Let's just hope and see." Jerkboy said.
We went outside, and i couldn't believe my eyes. The whole place was on fire, angels panicking. "Whats happening!" I shouted. "The palace is under attack! Lord NightShroud has striked!" An angel panicked. The place broke apart. One piece fell off into earth. In earth people were panicking too, watching the pieces fall onto the ground. It was like a earthquake happening there. "Muahaha! Ruleing the world is like stealing candy from a baby! And you are all the babies with the candy!" A voice shouted from above. "Lord NightShroud!" Oreo screamed. "Oreo! Make a portal to Lord NightShroud's home now!" I screamed. She made the portal and we rushed in. I kept my fingers cross that the angels in their palace will be safe, and the people on earth.
We landed. And I saw Lord NightShroud standing there. We seemed to be in space, with a huge platform under us. I looked, and Slevin and another guy was there, doing stuff on some machine. Slevin's clothes were torn apart, and so was the other guy. "Step!" Jerkboy screamed. "My best friend!" He said. Slevin and Step looked at us, and cheered. "Did i tell you to stop?" Lord NightShroud shouted. He hit them on the back with spike balls. "Arrrg!" Slevin panicked. I looked at the screan, and they were destroying earth and the angel's palace. "I'm sorry! I had to or Lord NightShroud would have killed me!" Slevin panicked. "Quit chit chatting!" Lord NightShroud hitted them again. "No one does that to my friends!" Jerkboy screamed. He charged at Lord Nightshroud. "NO JERKBOY!" Katy screamed, As soon as Jerkboy hit Lord NightShroud with his sword, a huge wave of shadows just pushed him, and he went down. He didn't move or breathe. He was dead.
I was sweating. Then Lord NightShroud made Slevin's and Step's eyes turn red. Then charged at Katy and Oreo. They went down. Slevin punched me, and so did Step. I felt like I was already dead. I fell to the ground, breathing.
"The angel's chose YOU? Don't make me laugh!" Lord NightShroud shouted.
I used my ice sword, but Slevin torn it apart. I used the instrument, but Lord NightShroud, Slevin or Jerkboy just did nothing, then Jerkboy threw the instrument off the edge. I used all my weapons, but they just eather broke or went thrown off the edge. Slevin punched me one my time, and i felt like a flatterned pancake. Slevin put his foot on me, squashing me more. "Muhahaha!" Lord NightShroud laughed. I remembered one weapon i forgot to use: The space gun. I got it out and before i shot Slevin and Jerkboy, I whispered "I'm sorry..." Then i shot them both, and they went down. I got one more bullet, and i shot Lord NightShroud. But it did NOTHING! "Nothing can defeat me! Not even the most special one of all!" Lord NightShroud laughed. I watched the screan of the machine. People were dead, the palace was torn apart. The world was destroyed. "And now every human is dead accept you, i will end you!" Lord NightShroud shouted. He stomped closer. "Stop! Please! I'll be your slave!" I screamed. "My slaves arn't going to be humans no more. They will be shadows." He explained.
He stomped on me extra hard. My legs and arms were like broken. I poked my head up, and i saw Katy, Oreo, Slevin, Jerkboy and Step on the ground. A tear rolled down my face. Then, memories went into my mind. How i met Oreo and how we defeated our first god. How Slevin saved us, how we could... fly. I remembered i could fly. I didn't fly once! So i used my last bit of energy, i flew into the air, and i charged at Lord NightShroud like a lightning strike! But as i went passed him, nothing happened. I just fell into the ground. I looked behind, and Rilakkum, Gooby, galla and all the other god's appeared. "You may have defeated the hero's. But we will stand!" Mats screamed. "Pika Pika!" Pikachu shouted.
"Hmmf, show me what you got!" Lord NightShroud shouted. I watched them, obtain their powers. Rilakkum got her ice powers, Gooby got her music powers, galla got his amazing accuracy powers, and all the god's got their powers too. They charged at Lord NightShroud. "Arrg!" Lord NightShroud screamed. But it only damaged him a bit. "GRRRAARRG!" He shouted. Then, all the god's suddenly got heart attacks when Lord NightShroud scared the living day lights out of them. "NOOO!" I screamed, but i should have kept my mouth shut, because Lord NightShroud tunred his head. "Your still not dead? Well thanks for reminding me!" He shouted.
He threw a shadow missile at me, it shot me, and... I was dead.
"So you think this would be a happy ending huh?" He shouted. "It maybe." A voice was heard. "Hmmf, who are you?" Lord NightShroud shouted. "I'm the king of the angel's palace, and i will only use my powers if this is an emergancy." He said. "I wonder what your power is... Oh i know! Kittens and rainbows and unicorns everywhere will make me feel good!" Lord NightShroud laughed.
The king angel raised his hands up. The weapons Katy and I got rised, and it got fixed. I was then alive, and so was everyone! The palace was fixed, earth was together! "I'll just destroy you, your palace, earth, the gods and the hero's! You think you impress me?" He shouted. "That's not the end of my powers..." King Angel said. He then clapped his hands together, and the weapons all combined into... a rainbow sword! "Ooo, I wonder what that will do. Oh wait, it will just make kittens and unicorns appear!" Lord NightShroud joked again. Me, my friends and the god's all got the rainbow swords. Then we all charged at Lord NightShroud. Lord NightShroud spawned shadow swords too, and the shadow swords charged at us too. "HERE WE GOOOO!" I shouted. "RAAAAAAAA" Everyone screamed. "Your powers are weak Lord NightShroud. Goodbye, Old friends." King Angel said. A huge explosion appeared.
I openned my eyes. Everyone woke up, accept Lord NightShroud. We all cheered. "King Angel..." Wheatley mumbled. We turned around. King Angel was down. "My powers are too strong for me too..." He said. "King Angel!" Rilakkum cried. "Please don't go!" Mats shouted. "Pikaaa!" Pikachu said. "I'm sorry my hero's. But I promise, I will always remember you once I'm dead." He said. "King Angel!" galla shouted, then the king angel's eyes closed, and he died. Andior, Stephano cried. "Wait... Wheres CakeSquid?" I wondered. "He must be back at the palace." Gooby said. We went to the palace. And the angel's cheered. But the cheering didn't last long as we layed King Angel on the floor. "He is the one who saved us." I explained. The angels were silent. "I know a perfect place for him." Step said. We went to the graveyard, and a huge tomb was there, with a hole as big as King Angel was there. "Before Lord NightShroud kidnapped me, i made this just incase King Angel died, since he is 114 years old." Step explained. Slevin frowned. We layed king angel in it then we put back the pile of dirt.
Before we all went back to earth, the angels suggested a picture of all of us. Me, Katy, Oreo, Slevin, Jerkboy, Step and all the god's squished us together. "Say Cheese!" The angel said, and as soon as he took the picture, i woke up.
"Wait, this was all a dream!" I shouted. I heard loud knocking on the door, Katy, Oreo, Slevin, Jerkboy and Step then went in. "Did we all have the same dream?" Step said. "So... All this was a dream? None of that was true? The god's, angels, King Angel and Lord NightShroud didn't exist?" Katy whinned. "I'm afraid so." Oreo mumbled. Suddenly, i looked at my drawer, and a picture of all of us were there. Just before we woke up, they took a picture of us. "Well even if it was just a dream, it was the greatest dream of our lives." I said. And we all smiled.
The End.
Thank you all for supporting me to make this story.
Hope you enjoyed.
~LouiseXminerX :)​

 

Nice ending =)

 

Nice job :3

 

Why didn't I notice this?
This handsome, smart, quick, good looking, pointy, powerfull, smart and modest cactus is the best villian that could excist... :D

Fun story! :)

 

Thank you all for supporting me to make this story :)
It was so fun making this, so fun that i decided to do another story.
Check out my new story called "War 3.0"
It should be in the creations ;)
And another huge thank you all for being in my story and supporting me!
The ending of my story also made me smile, and i hope you all did too! :D
And heres just one more thank you...

:)

 

Great Story!

 

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