The Edge Of Time(Sci-Fi-themed stories)

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  1. KolyaPlaysx

    KolyaPlaysx The pusher of squares.

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    Hello, everyone! I'm starting my sci-fi-themed novel, The Edge Of Time.
    It is mainly about the future, nothing else.
    And if you'd also like to get yourself a role in it, please post a message. :)

    So, yeah, let's start, meet the characters:
    - Snecto: a funny, smart and athletic guy.
    - Jessica: a nerdy gamer girl, who gets bullied a lot.
    -Frank: a guy who can play piano, violin, and many more and he is smart and athletic.

    -- Chapter 1: The Morring --
    "What a beautiful day..", said Snecto while waking up..
    "I need some coffee, please", said Snecto to the computer.
    "Will be done, sir!", said the computer.
    "Thank you!", said Snecto while dressing up.


    "Here is your coffee, sir", said the computer while giving Snecto coffee.
    "Would you like anything else, sir?", computer asked Snecto.
    "Please, change the background of my room to a jungle-like theme.", said Snecto.
    "Will be done, sir!", said the computer.


    Also, if you do not know; Snecto lives in a house named 'The House-Machine', which has a computer that helps Snecto and his friends when they need things like coffee when they're waking up. Also, Snecto lives in the house alone.

    -- The end of Chapter 1 --
    Did you like the concept? Do you want more? Feedback is welcome.




     
  2. DesktopTable

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    Avoid being repetitive in both names and verbs.
    I wouldn't call this part much of a chapter, it only consists of Snecto talking to his AI.
     
  3. KolyaPlaysx

    KolyaPlaysx The pusher of squares.

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    @DesktoTable
    This is mainly a little test, ugh, locking the thread. I'll go on making it on Wattpad. ;P
    I'll share the full version later. ;P
     
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