My first story: Reality™

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  1. CarmineSnow

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    Then for the moment, ITS DEAD. DEAD, ALL DEAD! xd

    Rocky, are you on MC rn?
     
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  2. mochi

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    Yep.
     
  3. CarmineSnow

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    Getting on
     
  4. mochi

    mochi t̶̀h̶e̵ ̷̧͝c̵̨á̢t͘ Donator

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    Here's some artwork by CarmineSnow. There are 2 of the characters, with the others to come shortly. They actually all have a fish symbol somewhere on them; Razi has a fish necklace, and Josie has a fish tattoo on her leg (Speaking of Josie's leg, the thing her knee is on is a box of katanas).
    All credit goes to Carmine, thank you very much for the amazing drawings. Here they are -

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    This one is Razi. I along with my friends who helped create this story each have a character that represents us - Carmine's is Razi.

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    This one is Josie, my character. There will be 2 more drawings, Franz and Nikoli. Franz is TheEntroGent's character (not tagging because he won't get the alert and has already replied to this thread), as possibly given away by the "Nothing is real" line. Nikoli is denshark03's character. Den is one of my friends that left the server a few months ago, also a close friend of the others I mentioned.
    The second chapter will be posted soon, and I will give Carmine credit in advance for helping me with it, as it'll be Razi's point of view.
    Have a nice day.
     
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    Thats inspiring!
     
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    Just so y'all know, this chapter is written by me, not @BlabDaFish
    She wanted me to do it, because, tbh, Razi is pretty much me... xD
    Here it goes.

    Chapter 2: Razi's view

    I was sitting against the wall. I had no idea what was going on.
    All I saw was Josie. Next thing I know there's blood.
    Lots of blood. It's coming from me, it seems.
    It's also coming from Josie. Her eyes.
    Her eyes are blood red. She laughs.
    "Why the hell is she laughing?" I ask myself.
    I try to stand, but I black out.

    She's gone. I'm sitting next to a box.
    I pick up the box and read the label.
    "Mac 'n' cheese..." I say aloud.
    A stove appears with some pots.
    "Anyone else want some?" I ask, but they're all gone.
    I stand, walk over to the stove, grab a pot, and open the box.
    After pouring the noodles into the pot, I read the instructions.
    "Cool. I need water. Where's the water, hm?" I tell myself.
    A sink. "Wow," I murmur.
    I walk over to the sink with the pot.

    "Why is it... That everyone goes and has fun without me..?"
    "That's what I was wondering, too."
    Who's that? Did they know I was making mac 'n' cheese?
    "Can I have some of that mac 'n' cheese when it finishes cooking?" The voice says.
    "Oh.. Uh... Sure...? I don't know, I didn't really know you were here," I blurt.
    "I've been right here the entire time. Right... Here," the voice whispers.
    I realize it was whispering in my ear.
    I turn, not wanting to be vulnerable. "Wha- Nikoli?"

    We sit on the floor and eat out of the pot. There were some utensils on the stove.
    "Did you know that the person you were talking to was me?"
    "No, I thought that it was Josie, at first. It was because I couldn't see you."
    "I couldn't see you either. I thought I was talking to a pervert!"
    He laughs.
    "Do I sound like a pervert to you, Razi?"
    "Well, no.. But I didn't know who you were..."

    "I. Love. Mac 'n' cheese!"
    "Whoa, calm down. Have you had mac 'n' cheese before?" Nikoli asks.
    "Uh, no. I love it so much! Wait. It's gonna be my new spirit animal!
    "Hold on. Let me get this straight! You've never tried mac 'n' cheese before?!"
    "No... Can we change the subject?"

    The first thing that happened before the fight.
    It's hard to remember.
    Franz... Franz just... Appeared...
    Then, then was a katana...
    Nikoli... He picked it up, I remember that...
    It disappeared... The katana disappeared...
    Franz had the katana.
    Lemons. A crate of lemons...Why lemons..?
    Next thing I know, lemons are flying.
    Flying at Franz. Flying from Nikoli.
    "Give me it!" Nikoli shouts.
    Franz deflects the lemons with the katana.
    "Why should I?" Franz smirks.
    "You taunt me. You tease me. You give me things that you take back for yourself. I DESERVE IT."


    The katana isn't in Franz's hands anymore, it's flying at Nikoli's head.

    The End
     
  7. mochi

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    I laughed really hard but then Nikoli had a katana thrown at him xd
    I love it o3o
     
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  8. CarmineSnow

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    Thanks, I'm honestly really proud of this chapter... I love the fact that mac 'n' cheese is Razi's spirit animal. <3
     
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    More spoilers:
    More stuff between Razi & Nikoli.
    More about Mac 'n' cheese
    More stuff about lemons
    More stuff about katanas
    More stuff between Nikoli & Franz
    More stuff in general
     
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    Another spoiler:
    Nikoli actually doesn't die.
     
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  12. CarmineSnow

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    Nice to know.
    Even I didn't know that

    Spoiler:
    The Mac 'n' cheese spirit animal becomes a bit of a fetish...
     
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    mochi t̶̀h̶e̵ ̷̧͝c̵̨á̢t͘ Donator

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    Well, upon becoming fish, all of the characters become immortal, which is shortly after the fight.
     
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    The immortality is also caused by the failure of a nuclear experiment.
     
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    1. Stop spoiling it c:
    2. That would also be after the stuff with Razi & Nikoli
    3. We need a medic, I think I'm dying.
     
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    Immortal, mental fish...
     
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    Spoilers:

    The second is.. well.. a rape scene. Literally.
     
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    "Spoilers, sweetie."
    Listen to Professor River Song

    She knows what she's talking about


    WhadafuqEdd
    Whydafuqdoyoupeopleruinmylifesomuch
    Why.3.


    Edd, I hope you do realize that...

    Franz wears a push-up bra and a mini-skirt.

    I've got dirt on you, son. Dirt that's gonna make you wish you were in Tartarus, rotting like an apple after a year of decomposition that still has decomposed all the way.
     
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    Okay, uh, yep.
    Onto the next weird chapter.

    Chapter 3:
    Nikoli's point of view.
    The last thing I remember was that Razi was making mac 'n' cheese.
    There was a katana, so I picked it up.
    Franz just... Appeared.
    The katana wasn't in my hands any more.
    Franz had it.
    He always did this... He put stuff for me to get it and took it from me.
    Suddenly, a crate of lemons appeared...
    I don't know why.
    I remember throwing the lemons at Franz...
    The next thing I know, there's a katana flying at my head.
    I don't remember being anywhere, all I can recall is a white room with nothing there.
    I don't know if Josie was there...
    I thought one of my friends would know what was going on.
    I think Franz did...

    I woke up in the white room I remembered being in...
    For some reason, I hear laughter all around me...
    It's getting louder and I realize I'm on the floor. There's blood around me.
    It seems to be coming from my head.
    I put my hand to my head. There's a katana in it.
    Wait, what?
    How...
    I sit up and look around.
    Razi and Franz...
    Are having a swordfight?
    "What's going on?" I ask.
    Razi instantly looks at me.
    "Nikoli!" She exclaims.
    Franz is just standing there.
    I don't know what he's doing.
    Razi opens her mouth to speak, but I answer her question before she asks.
    "I don't know."
    Razi grabs the katana and pulls it out of my head.
    It hurts, but I don't say anything.
    I'm alive. I don't know how.
    Franz summons a katana, and I remember everything.
    If I lived through a katana in my head...
    I'm not afraid to fight him.
    As if reading my mind, Franz hands me a katana.
    Which leads me to the thought...
    Maybe he actually was reading my mind.
    For some reason, this makes me angry.
    I charge at him with the katana. He tries to stab me, but I deflect it.
    I hear the laughter again.
    I start laughing.
    It gets louder...
    And begins to sound crazy...
    I push Franz against the wall and hold him there.
    I stab his neck and let him fall to the floor.
    But he doesn't.

    The next chapter will be posted soon.
     
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    I'm so discombobulated rn
    Like, I can't even
     
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