My 4th Story: Soulless Powers

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  1. IAMINACTIVEBYE

    IAMINACTIVEBYE Donator

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    I can't believe this is my 4th story already :D
    Anyway, just a quick fact is that I got the idea of this story from the movie Frozen, if your a fan or not.
    But anyway, please enjoy and remember to post your feedback below and also ask if you want to be in the story :)
    Characters:
    @LouiseXminerX
    @QueenAngel32
    @Katy9078
    Pleeeaaseee enjoy :D
    Chapter 1 - The Cave
    I stared through the window, bored and miserable with nothing to do, when I suddenly heard a knock on the door. I rushed to the door and saw my two buddies, QueenAngel and Katy, looking excited. "Guess what? we're going to the beach today!" QueenAngel cheered. I cheered with excitement, we all loved going to the beach as this make's our friendship grow.
    As we walked to the beach, we walked on the warm sand and smiled as the happy people around us were full of joy. "Want me to get you two some ice cream?" I suggested. "Sure, we'll stay here and chat." Katy said.
    As I ran forward, something captured my eye. I looked to the left, and a mysterious cave was there. I have never seen it before even though I have been to the beach over 10 times.
    I look closer, and sparks of electricity glowed inside. "Uhh... hello?" My voice echoed through the cave. As I started the enter the cave, it was completely dark, when suddenly a small glow of light was at the end of the cave. I slowly walked towards it, and as I stood in front of it, I started to feel a bit dizzy. I realised this could be a trap, and as I tried to start running out of the cave, I suddenly fell down and went unconsious. Huge boulders fell at the cave's entrance, making it impossibly the escape.
    "It's been 30 minutes, and still no sign of her!" QueenAngel shouted. "Should we go look for her?" Katy suggested. QueenAngel agreed and walked with her. They did not know the cave with boulders at the entrance as they walked past it.
    My body felt a spark of power enter me...
    To Be Continued...
    Yes, I know this chapter is quite short, but when I add more chapters they will start to become longer...
    I will possibly add the following people in the next chapter or so:​
    @MappyTurtle
    So if your not MappyTurtle and you want to join in the story, please let me know below.
    Please do not do this after Janaury the 16th, since I will be away for 2 weeks then. Cause I'm going on a cruise to Fiji :)
    Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and I will keep adding the chapters possibly almost everyday.
    Thanks For Reading!!! :D
     
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  2. Katy_

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    Nice start!
     
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  3. Ninjaman

    Ninjaman Goodbye letter in info page

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    I would like to be in the story :)
    And have fun on your cruise!
     
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  4. nala

    nala A cat in a sock

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    Nice start!

    May I please be in the story?
     
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  5. QueenAngel32

    QueenAngel32 I'm up ❤

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    That's a nice start c:
     
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  6. TheUndeadBrave

    TheUndeadBrave Life's too short, make the most of it!

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    Interesting start! I like it.
     
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  7. IAMINACTIVEBYE

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    Thank you all for the nice comments, I was getting a bit worried that no one would like it...
    Anyway, If you requested to be in the story and your not in this chapter, don't stress out, you'll probably be in the next chapter ^_^
    Characters:
    @LouiseXminerX
    @QueenAngel32
    @Katy9078
    New Characters:
    @John_0696
    @Ninjaman4646
    Please enjoy ^_^
    Chapter 2 - A New Force
    As I woke up, confused and stressed with questions in my mind. I couldn't remember anything, the last thing I could only see in my mind is when I was with Katy and QueenAngel at the beach. As I looked up, some stranger was standing there. "Who are you? Where am I?" I demanded for answers. "Do not fear child, Call my Ninjaman, and you are our only hope." He answered. "Our you say? There isn't anyone around, so who is this other person you speak of?" I asked. And out of the shadows, some guy appeared. "This is John, my partner. He'll be your guide and can go tiny so no one can see you since people have thought he was buried in the graveyard." He said. "Ok, first, guide me with what? Is this just some prank, well HEEELLLL NO!" I shouted. "We do not have enough time. Go." John said. He then turned tiny and went in my backpack. The boulders of the entrance suddenly disappeared. Without questioning, I ran out, wondering where Katy and QueenAngel were.
    They suddenly spotted me, while they were hanging out near the sea. "Where were you?" Katy asked. "In that ca-" But as I turned around, the cave disappeared. "The what? Cat? I LOVE CATS! WHERE?" QueenAngel screamed. "Nevermind, let's just get some ice cream." I said. John peeked out of the backpack.
    As we got ice cream, Katy was still confused and worried. "Why were you hiding from us?" She asked, looking serious. "I was... Walking, just wondering about... Where the ice cream shop was." I said, with a wobbly smile. "We have been to the beach more then 10 times, how could you forget?" QueenAngel said. "My memory went blank, let's just not talk about this and go home." I shouted. "What is with you?" Katy shouted. "Something has gone wrong with you. Let's just leave you here while you think how crazy you are." QueenAngel shouted, and they left me. "You still got me." John tried to cheer me up. "I don't understand... Is this real?" I wondered. Suddenly, the sun fell down, and my arms grew heaps of hair. "Whats happening?" I cried. My teeth grew, a hairy tail sprung out. I couldn't control myself. I let out a huge howl. When I went to the sea while confused, I saw a reflection of myself while staring at the sea...
    A huge wolf was what I saw in the reflection.
    To Be Continued...
    Thanks for the nice comments once again, remember if you want to be in the story, please ask below :D
    Also to post your feedback below ^_^
    Thanks For Reading!!! :D​
     
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  8. John_0696

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    ooohhohoh louise is a werewolf now i see xD

    good job louise! c: i cant wait to see the next part!
     
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  9. nala

    nala A cat in a sock

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    Good job! Can't wait to see the rest.
     
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  10. TheUndeadBrave

    TheUndeadBrave Life's too short, make the most of it!

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    I can't wait to see how this plays out!

    This is very interesting.
     
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  11. TheBlackHamood

    TheBlackHamood Feel Pain, Accept Pain, Know Pain

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    add me in this
     
  12. KokichiOma

    KokichiOma Ultimate Supreme Leader Donator

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    Hey Louise, I has question.
    Can you add me in a chapter and post it on the 3rd of Jan? <3
     
  13. IAMINACTIVEBYE

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    Why of course ^_^

    Anyway, thanks so much for all these friendly replies ^_^
    I just hope this story doesn't become forgotten when I go on my cruise (If you didn't notice, I'm going on a cruise on the 16th of Janaury and coming back in 2 weeks, and if your curious, I'm going to Fiji :D)
    Characters:
    @LouiseXminerX
    @QueenAngel32
    @Katy9078
    @John_0696
    @Ninjaman4646
    New Character:
    @nalaex
    Please Enjoy :D
    Chapter 3 - Busted
    My heart was pounding. "How..." I wondered. John hopped off my backpack and enlarged. "This is possibly what NinjaMan is talking about." John suggested. "You better hide, if someone see's you they could call the police." John panicked. I suddenly heard footsteps. I turned around, and a girl was there, looking shocked. As I took a closer look, it was Nalaex. "AAHHH! CRAP! Ok... Don't panick... just quickly call the police and..." "WAIT! PLEASE DON'T!" I cried. "...Do wolves talk?" She wondered. "Wait... that voice sounds familiar..." She wondered. John quickly became tiny again and hid into my backpack. "You can't be that stupid Louise, are you?" She asked. "I'm not stupid. And yes, that's mean." I sighed. "Oh you, the one who think's that your the most perfect girl in the world and the most prettiest... but look at you! You look like a bucket of smashed crabs." She laughed. "To get my revenge... I'll call the police." She laughed. "Revenge on what? I did nothing to you!" I shouted.
    "You stole my popularity in high school... All the boys loved me until you came. You were like a magnet, and as soon as those boys saw you, they zoomed to you, like you were giving free pizza." She sneered. "But now, It's time for pay back." She got her phone out. Pressed 0... another 0... but I stopped her before she could finish. "I'll do anything!" I cried. John suddenly became worried. He whispered in my ear "Are you crazy? She could make you fall off a cliff or something even WORST!" He shouted. "What choice do I have?" I sighed. "You must get the Diamond Of The Sea in the Royal Museum." She smiled. "What? That will be impossible!" I cried. But then she got her phone out again. "Fine." I sighed.
    Without her looking, I rushed into the toilets. John hopped out of my backpack and enlarged. "Okay, first, we would be caught by the body guards anyway. Second, We could even face death if we put our hands... or paws onto the Diamond. And thirdly, everyone would freak out if they saw you in this animal." She shouted. "And another thing. Why are you in the womens toilet?" I chuckled. John looked embarrassed. "Nevermind that." He sighed. "I think I know how to get the Diamond." I smiled. John felt worried.
    As sneaked through the roads and people, we finally found the museum, but it was locked. I didn't have a choice, so I punched the window, and it shattered. "I guess being a wolf increases your strength." He figured out.
    As we entered, we saw right in the middle of the hall, a beautiful sparkly Diamond, that looked like there was water inside of it. "That must be it." I said. As I sneaked down, near the Diamond, I got my paws ready. I placed my paws on the Diamond, but a huge net caught me. "Where did this dog come from?" Someone near the net called. "Allwell, I'll kill it tomorrow, better put it in a cage." It suggested. As he threw me into a cage and locked the door, I felt nervous. "Well, It was nice knowing you... Let's hope our last 24 hours are good ones..." John sighed.
    To Be Continued...
    If you wondering when I add people to the stories, its usually after a chapter, so if someone asks to be in the story after I made one, they'll be in the next chapter.
    However, sometimes I may add them in the chapter after, so please do not worry.
    Of course, I add anyone to the story, even if your not so nice to me or I have never met you.
    But anyway, I promise I'll add the people who requested to be in the story in the next chapter.
    Please remember to comment your feedback and ideas, and if you want to be in the story, feel free to ask below ^_^
    Thanks For Reading!!! :D​
     
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    TheBlackHamood Feel Pain, Accept Pain, Know Pain

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    I wasn't added, I cri evrytiem
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  15. IAMINACTIVEBYE

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    Like I said, I'll add you in the next chapter ^_^
    It's just hard to fit everyone in the same chapter
    Please don't stress out, I promise I'll put you in the next chapter :)
    But it's quite unlikely that I'll put in the chapter after.
     
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  16. TheUndeadBrave

    TheUndeadBrave Life's too short, make the most of it!

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    Can I be added to the story?
     
  17. Casper

    Casper Durpz pls.

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    May I be added?
     
  18. IAMINACTIVEBYE

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    So many comments ^_^ thank you all!
    Characters:
    @LouiseXminerX
    @QueenAngel32
    @Katy9078
    @Ninjaman4646
    @John_0696
    @nalaex
    New Characters:
    @TheUndeadBrave
    @TheBlackHamood
    Enjoy :D
    Chapter 4 - The Shadow Enemy
    John just kept running in circles, still panicking, while I concentrated, thinking what to do. Suddenly, I heard footsteps. John quickly went in my backpack. I kept my back as close to the wall. The shadow grew bigger, and suddenly I saw a different body guard.
    "Aww... A little puppy... You wanna bone?" It came closer, making cute faces. "Listen, get me out of here!" I whispered. "You can... talk? WOOOOOW. I'm Undead. Hi. Wanna be my puppy?" He asked. "You got to help me. I'm suppost to be a human, but I got turned into this! Please let me out." I cried. "Ok little puppy." Undead cheered. "And just call me Louise, okay?" I sighed. He unlocked the door and I zoomed out. "Also, is the Diamond over there for sale?" I asked. "I'm new here, you can have it." He smiled. I quickly grabbed the diamond. "Listen, I need to give this to someone, wanna come with me?" I asked. "Sure little pup- I mean. Louise." He winked.
    As we hurried to the beach, I saw Nalaex there, standing around. "About TIME you squirt!" She shouted. "There, now won't you tell anybody?" I asked. "Maybe... Since you just got a new boyfriend." She sneered. "What? Who? Wait she's a GIRL?" Undead wondered. I face palmed, which was pretty dumb since my claws were pretty sharp.
    "I'll think about it, but if you steal my new boyfriend then I will tell the police!" She shouted.
    Suddenly, I saw a figure in the distance, staring. As soon as I blinked, it disappeared.
    The figure then appeared infront of me as soon as I disappeared again. Everyone was in shock. When John peeked out of my backpack and saw the figure, he fell back into the backpack. "I'm BlackHamood, also known as the Shadow Lord. Appears you have stolen my powers..." He sneered. "What? Oh no this is a mistake! I just entered a cave and NinjaMan was there and..." "NINJAMAN?" He interrupted. "Yeah... got a problem mate?" I sneered.
    "Listen up. If you don't find NinjaMan in 3 days, your next destination is your grave. Understood?" He shouted. "Ye-Yes sir!" I said was a wobbly smile. Then when I blinked, he disappeared again. Everyone was speechless. Suddenly, the sun rose up. Then my paws turned to fingers. The hair disappeared. My teeth grew small. I realised I was back to human. "Aw... Thought you were a boy." Undead sighed. "Dude? Seriously?" John sighed when he peeked out of his backpack. "Wow, I didn't know you have a talking figure!" Undead noticed. He grabbed John and played around with him. "NEEEYYOOOWWW... PEW PEW PEW! ENEMY SHIP IS COMING! NEEEYOOW!" I plucked John out of his hands. "Um, he's a real person." I sighed. "Oh." John seeemed to be shaking. "Is this real life?" He wondered. I just dropped him into my backpack again. "Did I just see a tiny person? Ok listen up! If I see one more weird thing about you I'll SERIOUSLY call the police, got that wimp?" She shouted. "Fine..." I sighed.
    To Be Continued...
    If you want to be in the story, please comment below and you might be in the next chapter ^_^ If not then probably in the chapter after.
    Thanks so much for all the nice comments too! :D
    Thanks For Reading!!! :D​
     
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    ninjaman no! thats the real john! hes a person!

    oh...

    AND THEN COMES A GIANT FIST!!

    Good job louise, cant wait for the next story c:
     
  20. Ninjaman

    Ninjaman Goodbye letter in info page

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    This is great! I was starting to wonder why I only said or was mentioned once in each chapter :P