Hi dis is liek mah 3rd craatun!!!1!one I decided to have some fun, and make a story that inspired me from a horror movie. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Starring: @MappyTurtle : The story's main character and lives till the end. (Name in the story: Mappy) @ItsStartheFox : Mappy's friend (Name in the Story: Star) @John_0696 : Ex-Teenage detective (Name in the story: John. @DMachine487 : Mappy's boyfriend (Don't take this seriously, It's just a story.) (Name in the story: Dan) @Animoes : Mappy's ex-boyfriend (Lives until the end too) (Name in the story: Animoes) I will add more characters later. Do not make apps, I will choose random people in the forums. @Magical_Sparklez : The Onryo. (Name in the story, Kayako.) (She is a japanese woman in this story)(Death: 1991) The Onyro's past : Kayako had a miserable past. Her mother was an Itako, an exorcist to the evil spirits. She used her daughter, Kayako, to 'eat' the evil spirits from her patients. She then married Takeo Saeki (No one here is Takeo Saeki k?) who cared for her so much. She then finds Peter kirk, an American man who was an exchange student in highschool she fell in love with. She saw him again, and fell in love with him again and wrote it in her journal she kept all her life. Her husband has an extreme anger temper and gets easily jealous. He then reads her journal .. When Kayako gets back home, She remembered that she left her journal in the attic. She sees Takeo reading it.. Takeo becomes enraged. Kayako knows what he just read, so she tries to run away, but he was too fast, and grabs her hair and sprains her ankle. She crawls down the stairs, attempting to reach the door, but Takeo grabs her. He then Seizes her hair and snaps her neck into a 90 degree vault and crushes her throat. Toshio Saeki, their son, was a witness. Takeo then drowns Toshio, and then stabs Kayako multiple times. She then comes back as an Onryo from the afterlife, stronger. Able to rip off jaws and kill people from fright. She then kills Takeo as an Onryo by hanging him with her hair. Her abilities are: Curse/Haunting Hair Demonic Possession Instant movement. Now to the main story!!! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- A cold wind breeze comes from the north, and we see Mappy, a 16 year old girl walking alone in the night. Her friend, Star, calls her. Mappy then answers, not checking the ID Caller. "Hey Star, what's up?" "Mappy, It's been 1 hour since you left. You said you wanted some air, and it's like you flew to spain or something! The party is gonna up till midnight and It's 10:30 PM now." "Sorry, I'm kinda lost. I'll use my GPS to come back, Good thing I pinpointed at the party's location, and I'd rather sit home and play tf2" "Yeah me too. Well good luck coming her, beware from the ghosts" "*Laughs* Shut up!" Mappy then hangs up. She has been walking for at least 15 minutes. "Almost there.. Just a bit more.." A noise comes from the trashbags. "*Gulp* Who's there?" She doesn't get an answer, so she hopes it was just a cat and keeps on moving. She ran away from the trashbags, as she has phobia from cats. Hearing the noise again, she grabbed a stick that was in the floor, and holds it defensively.. "Come out!" She hears someone running, and she attempts to throw the stick at the person running. "Who are you?!" The person gets closer... And closer... and stops. She can't see it clearly, but can see it a bit, and she decides to use a flashlight. Mappy gasps and terror as she sees a woman, who had dead white skin and long black hair covering half of her voice. She threw the flashlight down The creature makes a death rattle and a croaking noise, Mappy ran away after that. She decided to listen to some music with the MP3 player she brought home. She thought it was just a prank show and just decided to keep on moving. After Mappy reaches her destination, only to see that everything is messed up, right and left. "Star? .. Micheal? .." "Oh hey Mappy, where have you been?" Said Micheal. Mappy looks at her watch "Wait, It's midnight already?" Star comes out of the bathroom "Yep. You were late, I was hoping we could have fun together, but I guess not everything can happen. So, what were you doing? Did the GPS get messed up?" Mappy knew that if she told them what she saw, they would think she was crazy. "Uhm, sorry. I was hungry so I stopped at a restaurant" Mappy excuses herself, and asks Micheal to drive her home She opens the door and sees her mother, angry. "Mappy, I've been trying to call you 5 times, and you never answered. We almost called the cops!" Mappy decided to make up an excuse, hiding about what she recently saw tonight "Sorry mom, It was a loud party, and phones can't stop it." Her mom sighs, and tells her to go to bed. Mappy turns off the light, and decided to take a rest and put her phone on 'Unavailable', to let her friends know she is sleeping. She then hears something moving in the closet. She wakes up, to see what's there, and she sees hair coming out of her red dress. As she gasps in terror, she flees the room, and sleeps in her parent's room. *12 hours later* We see Animoes, paralyzed with fear. She told every single of her friends about the dead white skinned woman he saw who had hair covering her face. Everyone thinks he is crazy, so he headed to one person who he could trust. Animoes knows everything about it, and tells his aunt, Ms. Dale, the school's principal, about it. "Hey Aunt, umm.. I have a question.." "What's wrong?" "Have you ever seen, like, anything.. completely white and creepy?" "Er, No." "What about the Saeki house?" (The Saeki house is a cursed place, where Kayako died in and would kill anyone fast who entered it) "These things are fake. It's just a house" "Oh .. Okay. I'll just leave then." Ms Dale decided to investigate the house .. *3 hours later* "What's so important that I had to skip my algebra test?" "Animoes.. I've been to that house yesterday with the police. There's nothing there.. It's just an abandoned house *Smiles*" Animoes then shrugs "But she.. No.. 'it' got my friends.. Dmuds .. Xad ... now she is coming for me!!" He then looks down, tearing up. "Animoes! ... I don't know what you're talking about" Animoes wipes his tears .. "W.. What?" "They're right here." Said his Aunt Dmuds and Xad show up next time him, left and right, as ghosts. Dead white skinned too. As he looks at Dmuds and xad slowly.. He screams in terror and falls off the couch He hears a creepy moaning noise from behind him And he sees His Aunt as a ghost too, and she is making the moaning sound, revealing that she got killed by Kayako. Animoes then flees the office and the screen goes black. End Of Part 1 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ And the part where me and @dmudstheaddict show up as ghosts next to animoes, it's kinda hard to imagine in it. But It's like this. Me and dmuds are the ghosts btw ;D and we aren't girls in the story.. This is how it looks like:
I'm a guy, if you haven't noticed... Anyway, nice story, I've seen bits of the original Grudge when I was 9ish and freaked out, this is a good reenactment with us. Also, can I change my name? If yes, make it something that starts with D.
So freaking confused. Mappy's girlfriend? Mappy is a girl... Then the names are consfusing. The character's personalities are a bit... off. It jumps around a bit. Otherwise its good. Grammar and spelling are almost perfect.
Part 2 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- New Character: @Heatdude Da Waffle : Animoes's brother (Name in the story: Heatdude) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- After what happened.. I can't just get careless.. what if she finds me? what if it WASN'T a prank? will 'it' get me? Said Mappy in her mind, during class. "Mrs. Mappy? what do you think you are doing, young lady?" Mappy looks up to her teacher "Sorry ma'am, I just had something in mind" "And what would that be?" "Nothing, ma'am." "*sigh* .. Please pay attention to class, remember, you are going to have the final exams next week" "Yes, ma'am." The bell rang after that, and the teacher asked Mappy to sit down. "Mappy, I know you. You are a straight A student and you always pay attention to class. Now, I know it wasn't 'nothing'." I just can't tell her, i don't want her to think i'm crazy or get her killed. "Well miss.. I- ... I- ..." "I won't tell anybody." I knew she meant it, as I am her favorite student and she is trustworthy. "Well.. I had a friend.. who was somewhere around 25 years old .. She is from Japan, and we know each other because my dad used to work with her. .. My dad told me she died and ... I think i saw her ghost .." "Mappy, there is no such things as ghosts." "Not that kind of ghost, ma'am. It was.. white skinned and just.. long black hair with those .. fully blacked out eyes." Animoes overheard her, because he was standing next to the door. After talking with the teacher for 15 minutes, she excused herself and left the school. Animoes chases after her to talk to her. "Hey, Mappy, Isn't it?" "Uhm, yeah." "I know what you saw." "What are you talking about?" "I overheard your conversation with the teacher, I've also experienced some creepy things, and I'm trying to resist it." "Is that why people think you're crazy?" "Yes.. but let's forget it.". Animoes and mappy found a comfortable place to talk in, and Animoes told her about his Aunt's death and his friend's death. "Wait.. Xad died?" "I'm afraid so" Mappy was shocked, as Xad was her best friend too. And she thought he was traveling away. "But how did he die?" Animoes decided to tell her the story in an organized way. Xadidax's story and death Xad knew everything about Kayako too. He once decided to investigate the cursed house to challenge the rumors that it is haunted. He looked everywhere in the house, but found nothing.. After that, he came back alone in the night, only to see creepier things in that house. He saw a bathtub full of hair, and a couple of bodies in trashbags in the attics. He then encounters kayako in the attic. He panic and ran away from the house Afterschool, He kept on seeing the ghosts of kayako, haunting him. As he is running to the telephone booth, he dials Heatdude's number. "H-... Heatdude? Is.. is that you?" He hears the Kayako's death rattle through the phone and gasps in terror and drops down the telephone. Toshio, as an Onryo too, grabs his knees, as Xad looks down, Toshio makes cat noises at him (His father drown the cat with him, and the boy's soul is merged with the cat). Xad is then consumed by Kayako's hair and as Kayako looks at him, he dies from fear and suffocation. Dmuds Dmuds lived in the Saeki house, alone, as he is the 'winner' of a contest. He experiences weird things in the house. Like dreaming about black cats in his room and hair all around him.. After he hears some noises from the attic, he grabs a flashlight and climbs to the attic. Only to see trashbags that has deadbodies on him. He encounters Kayako in the pitch black attic, who appears behind him. Kayako rips off Dmuds's lower jaw and he dies from fright and blood loss. Back to the main story: "How did you know about how they died?" "She plagues me the whole time with her victims" "Why is that?" Animoes bites his lip, and excuses himself and leaves. Leaving mappy alone, she is afraid to walk home as it's getting dark, so she calls a taxi and goes back home. Animoes enters his house only to see Heatdude looking at a wrestling match on tv. "And he collapses! Hah!" Says Heatdude, in excitement." "Turn that off Heatdude, I'm tired and I'm not in the mood with your screaming." "No way bro, it's the final wrestling match!" Animoes sighs angrily and goes to bed. *18 hours later* "Hey Mappy" Said Star, in a happy way "Hey star, what's going on?" "Oh nothing.. It's a surprise... You don't happen to know what today is, right?" It's mappy's birthday, but she doesn't know that as she forgot about it. "Um, No." "Oh okay, well I'll catch with you later!" "Umm, Okay then." "Dan, did you bring the cake for mappy's birthday?" Said Star to Dan "Yep, what now?" "We will need some decorations, this NEEDS to be a special birthday. She's turning 16!" "I think the local market has some girly birthday decorations" Dan and star go to buy somethings for her birthday, and prepare everything and invite people. Star hangs out with Mappy the whole day outside, and then gets a call from Dan, Dan tells star that everything is set and they should come back since It's already getting dark. "Oh Mappy, I'm tired. How about we watch some movies at your house?" "Oh sure. I've some cool new movies i bought from the DVD store. It's about ninja assassins and tf2 combined. Why don't we go buy some candy and all of that?" "Oh I saw your mom bring some. Let's go!" As they arrive to the house, Star asks mappy to open the door. As Mappy opens the door, everyone screams 'SURPRISE!!' "Oh my god! Star you did ALL of this for me?" Said Mappy, super happy "Yes I did." "Well what are you waiting for? Cut the cake!" Said Dan. As Mappy cuts the cake, Star then gets plagued by Kayako about her recent victims she recently killed. Star runs to the bathroom, and throws up. he sees hair from the throw-up, and he collapses in the floor. Dan and Mappy calls the ambulance to help Star out. After a while, Star wakes up in the hospital strapped into bed, since she was acting crazy about seeing Kayako from the window of the bathroom. The light then flashes on and out, on and out.. And Kayako's hand appears and grabs star's hand. Star then escaped forcefully, and as the cop comes and checks, he gets tricked by Star and Star runs away, and Kayako pulls the cop into the pitch black room and kills him. Star runs and runs, then sees nurses creepily looking at her, thinking she is crazy. Star sees Kayako standing behind the Nurses, Star screams and runs away. He reaches a deadend, and sees the light from the far end of the room flashing on and out .. Then Kayako appears. As every single light breaks one by one, Kayako moves closely, but instantly. Star climbs out the window, then the ladder.. He reaches the rooftop, and it was a cold night. As he shivers, he looks infront of him, and kayako appears behind him with her death rattle. As Star falls on his back and moves away from Kayako, he looks behind him once more and she is gone. He is leaning on his back in the far end.. Kayako appears and pushes Star off from the building to his death. As Heatdude was gonna visit Star, he then encounters Star falling from his death.. Heatdude falls on his back in shock, and calls the police. The firefighters came to go to the rooftop to see the culprit, but see no one. Star's death remains a mystery to the police and heatdude. End Of Part 2 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ The next part will mostly Include heatdude investigating Kayako's past and finding her journal and as always, becomes her next victim. Be on touch plz <3
Okay, two things. (cookies to whoever can name the show and the episode firse ^_^) And 2, I don wanna die! ;-;
I wasn't really planning to let you die .. Your girlfriend, who carelessly enters the cursed house to challenge the rumors that it's cursed, is the one who's gonna die c:
Part 3 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Updates: There are minor updates. Mappy and the others are actually In Japan attending an school for exchange students from america, australia, etc .. And the one who is gonna be Heatdude's girlfriend IS ... *drumroll* @XenonHD @Vaicun (I don't hate you Vaicun, I just couldn't find another one good for the part.)(Name in the story: Naoko) @Shadow_Riolu : Yurei (A human-like dark ghost)(Name in the story: Takeo) @Yomc : Heatdude's friend (Name in the story: Yomc couldn't think of a name) Enjoy! :) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ We see Heatdude walking online in midnight, looking for the 'cursed house'. It's okay heatdude.. there is no such thing as 'ghosts' .. Heatdude saying to himself. i cri evertim He arrives at the house. It looked burned down and messed up. He knocks on the door, hoping to get an answer, but doesn't get an answer. The door opens by itself .. Heatdude was having second thoughts, but was already there. He was looking and listening for anything. After that, he sees a hand coming out from the corner's pitch black shadow. It got closer, and closer. Heatdude couldn't see it from how shadowy it was, and It is revealed to be the Yurei. Heatdude didn't know he is a ghost, as he is human-like. So he tries to talk to him, but receives no answer from the Takeo. Heatdude walked backwards, trying to get out, but the door was locked when he tried to open it. He looks back at the shadowy person, but he disappeared. After that creepy experience, he was forced to explore the house. It was all dark and burned down (Mappy was the one burning it down, hoping it would stop the curse. But this instead releases the curse, meaning kayako didn't have to be in that house to kill someone), and he was ready to break a window to escape. But all he knew that Kayako would rip his head off if he did that. He heard someone running, and he holds a ripped off wood from the wall and holds it defensively "Who's there?!" Heatdude, saying it in a scared way. The noise of the running footsteps came closer, and heatdude fell on his butt back because of the blood in the floor, and as he got up, everything was quiet. He enters a room, which was Kayako's room, and finds a journal. He reads it and finds this: " 私は小林というこの男と恋に落ちた.. 私は彼には存在しなかったと私は彼と話をしようとしたたびに、私は恥ずかし取得したいとあきらめる。 私は私の大学時代の彼を知っていたし、彼は私が友人と話すことができただけだったが、私は彼と恋に落ちた。 彼が結婚したとき、私は彼に何もなかったと武雄と結婚し、同じように、私は感じました。 私は、彼がそこに教師であることから、俊夫の学校では小林に会って、私は再び彼と恋に落ちた。 彼は私の夢の男です" "What? I'm gonna have to give this to someone so they can translate this for me." He takes the Journal and puts it in his bag. He thought that maybe if he had 'its' journal, he would be able to escape. lolnub He heard noises from the attic, and he grabbed his flashlight and climbed there. He found trashbags with bodies in it. He was paralyzed with fear when he saw it, and he heard noises from behind him. He looked back, and encounters kayako crawling towards him, and she stops, and Heatdude freezes. She looked at him with her wide staring eyes, and makes croaking noises at him. Heatdude screams in terror and escapes the attic and flees the room, and encounters Takeo, as a ghost. He fell on his back, moving away from Takeo. Takeo moved slowly to him, and grabs his feet and pulls him to the stairs, Takeo disappeared, and Heatdude got up, then Toshio pushed him off the stairs, but Heatdude survived. He had a minor injury. He wasn't injured severely, because he was wearing heavy clothes because of the cold weather. He gets up, and encounters kayako crawling down from the stairs, kinda covered in blood. After she reaches the end of the stairs, Heatdude gasps in terror, and flees the house and throws a bottle from the ground at the window and sees Kayako at the window of the house and he runs away. He goes to his girlfriend's house, and hopes she can translate the page of the journal he found. (Yes yes, a non-japanese person marrying a japanese person is normal and ordinary.) Her name was Naoko, and he doesn't know that she is.. Kayako's younger sister. Kayako frequently watches Naoko in her house or anywhere else, but never tried to attack her. Naoko decided to translate the page, and gives it to Heatdude. " I fell in love with this man named kobayashi .. I didn't exist to him and every time i tried to talk with him, I'd get shy and give up. I've known him in my college days and he was the only one I could talk to as a friend, but I fell in love with him. when he got married, i felt like, i was nothing to him and married Takeo. I met Kobayashi In toshio's school, since he is a teacher there, and I fell in love with him again. He is the man of my dreams." "Thanks, honey." "You didn't go to the cursed house, right?" "No.. Umm... Mappy gave it to me." *12 hours later* Naoko decided to stop the curse once and for all as Kayako plagues her mind with her victims. She arrives at the house and opens the door and didn't get scared from the look at the house. She looks up, and sees Kayako standing and looking at her. Naoko screams in Japanese "WHAT DO YOU WANT?" Kayako, instead of killing her, she made her die the same way Kayako did. Kayako disappears, and Naoko runs upstairs and gets inside a room and sees Takeo, in his living form, but still a ghost, reading Naoko's journal. (She didn't write about another man, she writes things that happens in her life.) Naoko runs from the room and Takeo chases her and sprains her ankle. Naoko then crawls down the stairs, and as she reaches the end of the stairs, Takeo grabs her hair. He then snaps her neck to a 90 degree vault, and drowns Toshio the same way before. Naoko becomes an Onryo after that, along with Kayako. Kayako has spiritual powers, but no as powerful as Naoko. Will heatdude ever know about this, or will he die too? Find out soon enough! End Of Part 3 ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Naoko won't be in the later stories until I decide to make the other story "The Onryo 2". Please do not copy me off or I'll call the police c: lol ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ty for reading dis i iz amazing i knu and im guna brianstorm some idaes for dis. ktnxbai
